Once someone has asked you a question form the Levels of Questioning, answer it fully, in complete sentences with correct punctuation and examples to defend/support your thinking. You need two examples, one from your text (a quote) and a real world example (connection you have )
Question asked by Fernando: How would you feel if you were in that situation.
In Number The Stars By Lois Lowry, Annemarie Johansen, also know as cat, and the rest of her family who included papa, mama, and her younger sister made a huge sacrifice. The Johansen's being great friends to the Rosen's who were Jew's, took in Ellen as if she were Lise. Lise was the older sister of Annemarie who died in a car accident a few years back. They did this because the Nazi party where relocating the Jew's and killing them. One night two Nazi soldiers came to pay a visit to the Johansen's because they assumed that they were hiding the Rosen's. They thought this because word on the street was, they are very good friend's.(43-44) When the Nazi's came Ellen had black hair witch was an odd characteristic for a German. The Nazi's would look at Ellen trying to find something wrong. At that time I would have felt very hopeless. My heart would have rose up as if it where to pop out and I would start to sweat because I would be terrified. This reminds me of the time when I was afraid and in deep trouble by my mom for breaking her vase. I would also be feeling proud of myself if I were her, because she had the guts to do what she did. I know I would feel proud because one time I took care of Adian which was a big risk, his mom would have killed me. If it were me, I would have needed lot's of foster to help me over come the stress, Annemarie, her family, and Ellen passed through.
Sergio,
ReplyDeleteYOu are awesome at ambiguity (look it up). You need to get better at being specific and clear. So, what process could you take to create a response that provides clear examples from your book and then more specific details about you to show how you would respond or feel in Annmarie's situation?
You need to open up and share who you are - look into your heart.
Grade 5 PP
Ms. LA
To fix this I listed grammer, spelling and puctuation errors. I also suggested several places where you need proof or my details. Overall, you showed much more reflection, thoughtfulness, and specifics in your answer. This is the real deal! Grade is 6PP - can't be proficient without the support. Can't be advanced with the other errors. Muy Bien start.
ReplyDeletealot is two words = a lot
remember it isn't a byline By:Lois = by Lois
, also known as cat,
wrong form of theyre = which means they own it?
Sentence 3 starts well but is missing the "what they are doing part" - read it again a loud
What text support would you use for why Nazis were suspicious about them hiding Rosens?
What an incredibly descriptive sentence with imagery when you describe your feelings with your heart. But why would you feel hopeless? Use your knowledge of the world here - did people die doing this? How do you know, what else have you heard or read?
Your 2nd and 3rd to the last sentences are long and confusing."Than I would..." How can you rephrase them so your point gets across that you would give yourself away and that you felt you shouldn't have done it. Why do you think YOU would feel like you shouldn't have helped if your "family" thought it was important?
hadnt than I wouldnt be in the situation - (2 missing ')
Annemaries family was, witch was on the verge to (missing ') (wrong witch)
exicuted aprintance (spell check)
nervouse (spell check)
and hopeless because the situation Annemarie was in was very nerve breaking (nerve wracking)
and hard to kep (spell check)
Excellant use of foster.
Sergio, This is much better. You give more of your own interpretation in to what you have done. I know it was a risk, but well done. Try to show more of your knowledge when you say why you would do that (In the past when i was in a situation that made me feel.... I would....). I can tell you took more time to try and fix grammer and punctuation. Keep working on this.
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